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MovieGuy Advanced Vidder
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Posted: Sat Jun 18, 2005 9:20 pm Post subject: |
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Man, my writing muse hit me like a brick today. Here is the new chapter:
Chapter Five
Kate woke up. There was rocks around and on her. She tried t oit up but there was something heavy on her chest. She moved some of the rocks on her chest and saw Jack's body lying on her. "Oh my God," She lifted Jack up and pulled her legs out from under him. She checked to see if he was breathing. Jack coughed and started to wake up. "Jack, are you--?"
"Sawyer and Michael."
"What?"
"Are they okay?"
"I don't know they're out on the ocean--"
"They came back. Sawyer was shot in the stomach and Michael's leg was stabbed by some bamboo."
"Where are they?"
"They were over near my camp."
"Okay, I'll go check and see if they're okay."
Kate stood up and limped along the destroyed cave floor. As she walked, she noticed some huge under some of the rocks. It moved. "Dude." Kate yelled back to Jack, "Jack, Hurley's alive!" Jack stood up and walked over to where he was. Hurley pulled himself out from under the rocks. "What happened?"
"We don't know. I think it was a bomb. Kate, check Sawyer and Michael."
Kate went over to Jack's campsite. She saw Michael. He was still under from the drugs and Sawyer... was gone.
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Alex walked back into the crater. It was a gigantic crater caused by an asteroid. "I took care of the cave people. What about the ones I saw coming towards here."
"They'll be here in an hour. We have to clear camp and prepare for them.
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"You seriously were in DriveShaft?" asked Nathan.
"Yes, I was. Bass."
"I listened to them in college. I really liked--"
"Stop," whispered Sayid. Everyone stopped and looked at him. "The crater." Everyone looked through the trees and saw a giant crater in the rock.
"Okay, Charlie and Elizabeth, you stay here and watch for anyone, especially Walt. The rest of us are going to go in and look any signs that they've been here." Sayid and the others walked into the crater.
Elizabeth stood next to Charlie. "You really shouldn't, you know."
"Shouldn't what?"
"Heroin."
"How do you know about that."
"I saw the statue sticking out of your bag."
"Maybe it's just a statue."
"I know it's not Charlie." Charlie uncomfortably looked around.
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Sayid walked down into the middle of the crater. Nathan, who was leading the rest, followed him down in. "This place is empty," Nathan said. Sayid stopped and listened, He could hear a beeping noise. He looked down and saw the flashin red light under the sand. He turned around to the others. "Run!" They started to run out of the crater, but it was too late. The bomb exploded. Charlie and Elizabeth watched in horror.
Well, somebody's dead now. You'll have to wait for chapter 6 to find out.
The sixth and final chpter of "Lifeless" will be up tonight. |
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MovieGuy Advanced Vidder
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Posted: Sat Jun 18, 2005 11:34 pm Post subject: |
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No one commented on chapter 5 yet, but here it is, chapter 6:
Chapter Six
Charlie and Elizabeth stood there. They coudln't believe what they just saw. "Okay, you stay here," Charlie studdered. "Yeah."
Charlie walked down into the crater. He looked around. He started to walk but tripped up on Nathan's arm. "Ow!" Nathan jumped in pain. Nathan was the only person Charlie saw. Nathan pulled half of his body out of the sand. It looked as if some of the dead were buried underneath sand. "Are you okay?"
"Yeah, I'm fine."
"Try and find any survivors."
Charlie went forward but tripped and fell to the ground. He hadn't noticed the one dead body not buried sand. He stood up and turned around to look at the body. He stopped. He fell to his knees and looked at the body. He couldn't believe it. Sayid was dead.
Episode Three: Bombed COMING SOON |
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Harry
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Posted: Sat Jun 18, 2005 11:38 pm Post subject: |
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Quote: | He couldn't believe it. Sayid was dead. |
Its about time LMAO |
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MovieGuy Advanced Vidder
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Posted: Sat Jun 18, 2005 11:51 pm Post subject: |
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BtVSfreak wrote: | Its about time LMAO |
It's about time Sayid died or about time I killed someone? |
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Harry
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Posted: Sat Jun 18, 2005 11:52 pm Post subject: |
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Both |
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Hobbes Council Member
Joined: 28 Jan 2005 Posts: 11208 Location: Vancouver, BC
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 1:54 am Post subject: |
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and the good news is this is who they probably want to kill off in the real show anyway, because they're havign a lot of negotiation problems LOL
YAY! Sayid dead = HAPPY!
that's two down in the second episode wow!
You best hope that Sawyer survives.... being shot.... being pulled 15 miles into shore.... and then an explosion which buried him in rock or else Aislynn will be all over your ass! |
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Ringwench Advanced Vidder
Joined: 14 Feb 2005 Posts: 446 Location: Ontario Canada
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 3:31 am Post subject: |
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Aw, dude, no way! Sayid rocks! I'll be pissed if he died. But I read on spoilerfix that Naveen ISN'T the one playing hardball with the contract (contrary to everyone's speculation), which means he's probably safe!
So YAY, no dead Sayid! _________________
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Hobbes Council Member
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 3:48 am Post subject: |
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Ringwench wrote: | Aw, dude, no way! Sayid rocks! I'll be pissed if he died. But I read on spoilerfix that Naveen ISN'T the one playing hardball with the contract (contrary to everyone's speculation), which means he's probably safe!
So YAY, no dead Sayid! |
Oh no! who's dead now?!??!! Charlie.....???? LOL |
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lostzilla Expert Vidder
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 4:25 am Post subject: |
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Yay!! Nathan's alive!
Well if it isn't Sayid who is it playing hardball??
I'm sure it's not the raft people, but anyway since Sayid is dead, maybe a Shannon/Nathan hook up next? _________________
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MovieGuy Advanced Vidder
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 4:30 am Post subject: |
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lostzilla wrote: | maybe a Shannon/Nathan hook up next? |
No. |
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lostzilla Expert Vidder
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 4:40 am Post subject: |
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Come on man, the girl lost two men who meant a lot to her in less than 2 months time, she needs someone! It makes sense, or you could turn Shannon into Buffy and she go fight the monster or something! _________________
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Hobbes Council Member
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 4:43 am Post subject: |
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I think the last thing you'd want is to be with Shannon SHe's obviously cursed or something! two guys in one week? LOL |
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lostzilla Expert Vidder
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MovieGuy Advanced Vidder
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 4:45 am Post subject: |
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If you want to die too, fine.
She's not gonna find out for a few days anyway. |
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lostzilla Expert Vidder
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 4:48 am Post subject: |
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NO!!! man...just that maybe something good could happen to Shannon!
Aight fine no hook up! and where's Walt?? _________________
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