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MovieGuy Advanced Vidder
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 7:20 am Post subject: "Bombed" Episode Three -- Fan Fic |
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I know I said a few hours ago that it would be Monday but i HAD to get this chapter written down.
Before reading this fic please the first two episodes: Starboard and Lifeless
Chapter three is currently in the works and should be up tonight. For those of you lazy enough not to read "Lifeless" or those who just want a recap, here it is, followed immediatley by chapter one.
Chapter One
P R E V I O U S L Y O N L O S T
Kate slowly walked toward the bush. Something was in there. She could see the giant creature breathing in and out. She walked forward but stepped on a branch. The polar bear lunged out at her.
She screamed and jumped out of the way and fell to the ground. She sat up and looked around. The bear was gone. How could that polar bear just disappear? she thought.
"Did you see it?"
"See what?"
"The bear."
"What? A polar bear?"
"Yes, it just attacked me." Kate heard the roar of the monster. Kate heard screams coming from the hatch. She ran into the jungle.
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"Crate..."
"Crate?"
"No, cra..."
"Michael, what?"
"--ter."
"Cra... ter. Crater?"
"Crater." Michael went under.
Jack went over to Sayid. "He said something about a crater."
"I know what he's taking about."
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Kate ran up to the hatch. Locke looked at her. "Did you bring anyone?"
"Where you just attacked?"
Cynthia stood up and walked over to her. "What are you talking about?"
"The monster. I just heard--" Another tree was pulled out of the ground as the monster screamed. The tree's roots stabbed into Cynthia's body and blood flew everywhere. Kate started to scream.
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Kate rushed in from the jungle, covered in blood. "Dude!" Hurley jumped and ran over to her, as did Jack.
"What happened? Are you okay?"
"This isn't my blood."
"What?"
Just then, the bomb exploded.
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"Stop," whispered Sayid. Everyone stopped and looked at him. "The crater." Everyone looked through the trees and saw a giant crater in the rock.
"Okay, Charlie and Elizabeth, you stay here and watch for anyone, especially Walt. The rest of us are going to go in and look any signs that they've been here." Sayid and the others walked into the crater.
Sayid walked down into the middle of the crater. He could hear a beeping noise. He looked down and saw the flashin red light under the sand. "Run!" They started to run out of the crater. The bomb exploded.
Charlie walked down into the crater. He tripped and fell to the ground. He stood up and turned around to look at the body. He stopped. He fell to his knees and looked at the body. He couldn't believe it. Sayid was dead.
Charlie, Nathan and Elizabeth were standing around Sayid's body. "Are you sure he's dead?" asked Elizabeth. "How could he survive this?" Charlie said, turning Sayid's body over onto his stomach. Nathan and Elizabeth looked away in disgust when they saw the rock impaled in the back of Sayid's head. "We got to get the bodies back to the caves."
"How? There's three of us and seven of them."
"Hey, who's that?" Elizabeth pointed toward the far end of the crater. There was a man standing there. Nathan and Charlie looked at him. "Hey!" Nathan yelled. "Who are you?"
The man pulled out a gun and shot. Blood shot out of Nathan as he fell to the ground. "Elizabeth, run!" Charlie grabbed her hand and they started to run. The man walked down into the crater and walked after them.
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Kate was moving rocks trying to find Sawyer. "Sawyer! Sawyer, can you hear me?"
Jack and Hurley were looking for people under the rocks. They had only found one body.
"Sawyer!"
"Kate?" Kate laughed as she moved some rocks to see Sawyer's pale face. "Are you okay?"
"My side hurts."
"Jack! I found him!"
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Charlie stopped and looked back. "We lost them, Elizabeth."
"Liz."
"Okay, Liz." Charlie reached into his pocket and stopped. He looked around and saw a large black tree. He stared at it He became pale and fell to the ground. "Charlie!" Elizabeth bent down and tried to wake him up. "Charlie! Charlie!"
Nate's probably pissed. |
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lostzilla Expert Vidder
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 11:57 am Post subject: |
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Damn right! I'm pissed! I got shot!
I'd better survive Movieguy, or else all hell is gonna break lose! Dude!
Where did Locke go btw?
More! More! More@ _________________
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lostzilla Expert Vidder
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 12:41 pm Post subject: |
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MY VERSION
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Elizabeth felt her heart beating faster and faster as she looked at Charlie’s pale and lifeless face, she grabbed his wrist, tried to feel his pulse but instead felt nothing.
She looked around tried to find something useful, overwhelmed with panic she started to cry.
“What am I going to do? What am I going to do?†she asked herself, knowing that she wouldn’t be able to come up with the answer when she suddenly heard the noise coming from behind. Afraid it might be the others she looked around hoping to find something to use for protection. She couldn’t move, couldn’t feel her legs, all she could feel were her warm tears running down her face.
The noise got closer and closer and she sat there holding Charlie’s hand when
Bam! Nathan came out from behind, his shoulder covered with blood. His face is pale from substantial blood loss.
“Nathan! Oh my god!†Elizabeth screamed.
“You’re alive, I thought you were deadâ€
Nathan sat down beside her, with one hand on his shoulder trying to stop the bleeding.
“I guess they can’t shoot for shit. They thought I was dead. They are coming for us. We have to find Jackâ€
“How? I don’t even know where we are.†Elizabeth said.
“Would you mid?.†Nathan got up, as he tore his shirt and hand it to Elizabeth to wrap it around his right shoulder.
“There’s so much blood, you sure you’re ok?†Elizabeth couldn’t help asking.
“Yeah, what about Charlie? Is he ok?â€
“I don’t know I couldn’t feel his pulse†Elizabeth started crying again.
“This is not good. We gotta get him back to camp, Jack would know what to do†Nathan tried to carry Charlie on his back but his pain prevented him from doing so.
“Let me help†Elizabeth said, when they heard something coming from behind the trees.
Nathan looked at Elizabeth, who was trembling with fear, as they walked down the hill trying to find dark spot to hide, Nathan looked back to see if there’s anyone behind them, when he saw a black gigantic figure running up to them. The sky was covered with black clouds and he couldn't see anything, when Bam@! the uprooted trees fell down from the sky right infront of them!
“Run!!!â€
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There! Nathan's alive! LOL ok now I;m waiting for your version Movieguy! _________________
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MovieGuy Advanced Vidder
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 7:33 pm Post subject: |
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LOL! That is so far from what's going to happen!
Chpater two at some point today |
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lostzilla Expert Vidder
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 7:35 pm Post subject: |
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LOL well I'd better be safe! by the way, did i tell you I suck majorly at writing?? _________________
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MovieGuy Advanced Vidder
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 7:37 pm Post subject: |
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lostzilla wrote: | LOL well I'd better be safe! by the way, did i tell you I suck majorly at writing?? |
That was actually pretty good. Not what's going to happen but good
SPOILER
Nate is not dead, but he will not show up for a few chapters. |
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lostzilla Expert Vidder
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 7:42 pm Post subject: |
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Poor Nathan! LOL you're gonna leave me there bleeding to death or what?? _________________
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MovieGuy Advanced Vidder
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 7:45 pm Post subject: |
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lostzilla wrote: | Poor Nathan! LOL you're gonna leave me there bleeding to death or what?? |
NOTE: None of the chracters in this story are based on real people. Including horndogs.
Okay, hotta get back to writing chapter two. |
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lostzilla Expert Vidder
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 7:49 pm Post subject: |
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Quote: | NOTE: None of the chracters in this story are based on real people. Including horndogs. |
oh shut up Movieguy@ LOL you know damn well chicks dig Nathan.. er... me LOL ( umm not concited or anything LMAO) and yeah I'm a proud horndog! so bite me dude _________________
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lostzilla Expert Vidder
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 8:05 pm Post subject: |
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btw what's your name? Movieguy. In case I write a fanfic LOL I'll make sure you get to hook up with some hot chick. _________________
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MovieGuy Advanced Vidder
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 8:14 pm Post subject: |
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According to my birth certificate, it's Colin.
Also, there's gonna be some Nathan/Rose action coming up. |
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ebizmybef74 Intermediate Vidder
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MovieGuy wrote: | According to my birth certificate, it's Colin.
Also, there's gonna be some Nathan/Rose action coming up. |
LMAO! Are you serious! That would make my day! _________________
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lostzilla Expert Vidder
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Posted: Mon Jun 20, 2005 2:31 am Post subject: |
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HAHAHA Nathan/Rose action?? I'll get you for this!! _________________
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MovieGuy Advanced Vidder
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Posted: Mon Jun 20, 2005 2:48 am Post subject: |
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lostzilla wrote: | HAHAHA Nathan/Rose action?? I'll get you for this!! |
Would you rather have the Nathan/Bernard action I also have planned? |
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lostzilla Expert Vidder
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Posted: Mon Jun 20, 2005 3:08 am Post subject: |
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Quote: | Would you rather have the Nathan/Bernard action I also have planned? |
LOL if you were talking about action action then it's fine. _________________
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