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MovieGuy Advanced Vidder
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 4:49 am Post subject: |
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With the others, being dragged along by his legs.
They're not going to find him until, like, episode 11. |
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lostzilla Expert Vidder
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MovieGuy Advanced Vidder
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 4:52 am Post subject: |
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With Shannon, part of the stuff I cut from chapter four was him barking at the bomb but they just thoguht he was barking at Aaron's crap's smell. |
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lostzilla Expert Vidder
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Hobbes Council Member
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 5:13 am Post subject: |
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BEHIND NATHAN! MWAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHHA |
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lostzilla Expert Vidder
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 5:16 am Post subject: |
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He wasn't on the plane! Warren is one of the others! Look out Nathan! _________________
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Aislynn Council Member
Joined: 03 Feb 2005 Posts: 35782 Location: Sawyerville, USA
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 5:31 am Post subject: |
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Hobbes wrote: | And don't feel like you need to write anyone into the story. In fact... don't do so at all it's better like this! |
*clears throat, rolls up sleeve* Now I'm sure you meant to say, "And don't feel like you need to write anyone other than Aislynn into the story because you already promised her you would." Isn't that right, Mr. H? Huh? HUH?
And hey, Aislynn doesn't need to be a main character or anything. She can play dead body # 815 for all I can. Just so long as Sawyer walks by and thinks, "Dang, she was fine. Too bad I didn't get to know her while she was alive!"
I'd be a happy fangirl then. I promise! *big smile*
*gasp* Sayid's DEAD?
...Well, at least it wasn't Sawyer. Sorry, Sayid. Them's the breaks...
J/K, I'm a Sayid fan, too. But I'm a Raving Sawyerette first and foremost, so I gotta represent my peeps! *looks around* Uh, do I even HAVE peeps???
More fic, MovieGuy! More, more, more!
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MovieGuy Advanced Vidder
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 6:04 am Post subject: |
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Episode Three: Bombed's first chapter will be up on Monday. Just to hold you over here are those deleted scenes I mentioned. Bold stuff is deleted.
DELETED SCENE #1: FIVE MINUTES
Kate looked around. How could that polar bear just disappear? she thought. Just then, she a rustle in the bushes and out came Nathan. She screamed. He screamed.
"Oh my God! What are you doing? Just standing here screaming at people?"
"Did you see it?"
"See what?"
"The bear."
"What? A polar bear?"
"Yes, it just attacked me."
"I was just over ther and didn't see a thing."
"How long where you there?"
"About five... min... utes."
"What were you doing over there?"
"Nothing. Nothing at all. So, anyway, about that date."
"I never promised--" Just then, she heard the roar of the monster. Kate heard screams coming from the hatch. She ran into the jungle.
"What the hell are you doing!?" Nathan watched Kate run into the jungle. He hadn't heard a thing.
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DELETED SCENE #2: EXTENDED BOMB SCENE
A dirty woman, 16 years old at least, slowly walked around the cave's exterior. She found a small hole in the trees and threw in a wet rag with a rope attached to it. Before se threw it in, she lit the rope's end on fire and quickly threw it in. She looked around and silently walked away.
It rolled along the cave floor and stopped next to Aaron's crib. Shannon and Claire were talking and didn't notice the bomb. Vincent started to bark violently. He tried to get Shannon and Claire to notice the bomb. "Why's he freaking out?"
"I don't know. Wait, do you smell that?" asked Shannon. Claire went over and sniffed Aaron's rag diaper. "He pooped. Let's take him somewhere where people won't complain about the smell." Claire picked up Aaron and walked with Shannon to another part of the cave. Hurley walked by them. Vincent continued to bark and freak out. "Dude, what's wrong with him?"
"Aaron's poop smell is freaking him out."
"Oh, are you sure? Becuase they how dogs act when hey smell bombs or drugs and stuff."
"It's the poop." Claire said as she started to walk faster as she thoguht about Charlie. "Okay, the baby's poop smells like bombs, I guess." Hurley continued on past them. He had finally gotten some new batteries for his walkman. He was listening to some music and the battery died. "Not again." He stopped right next to the rag. The fire was getting close to the rag. He hit it against the crib and it started to play again. He walked on.
Kate stumbled along, down the path to the cave. Cynthia was just stabbed by a tree and Locke was missing. She had no idea where the other people at the hatch had gone. She heard a branch crack and stopped. She could have sworn she just saw a woman. She started to run back to the cave. Kate rushed in from the jungle, covered in blood. "Dude!" Hurley jumped and ran over to her, as did Jack.
"What happened? Are you okay?"
"This isn't my blood."
"What?"
Just then, the bomb exploded. |
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lostzilla Expert Vidder
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Hobbes Council Member
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 8:25 am Post subject: |
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why delete that stuff!? it was pure gold! |
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MovieGuy Advanced Vidder
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 8:29 am Post subject: |
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Hobbes wrote: | why delete that stuff!? it was pure gold! |
I had a limit on how long the chapter could be. I hated cutting the baby's poop smells like bombs line.
I print out each chapter and it HAS at most a page long. This one was 1 1/2 pages. |
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Hobbes Council Member
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 8:30 am Post subject: |
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what are you writing these for then...? it sounds like someone's giving you regulations or something |
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MovieGuy Advanced Vidder
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2005 8:50 am Post subject: |
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Hobbes wrote: | what are you writing these for then...? it sounds like someone's giving you regulations or something |
Yeah, I'm giving myself regulations. Not to mention I like editng stuff and turns out writing is just as much fun as video. |
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ebizmybef74 Intermediate Vidder
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Posted: Mon Jun 20, 2005 1:41 am Post subject: |
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Quote: | Elizabeth stood next to Charlie. "You really shouldn't, you know."
"Shouldn't what?"
"Heroin."
"How do you know about that."
"I saw the statue sticking out of your bag."
"Maybe it's just a statue."
"I know it's not Charlie." Charlie uncomfortably looked around. |
I really liked that part! _________________
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Ally Intermediate Vidder
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Posted: Tue Jun 28, 2005 10:56 am Post subject: |
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nice nice nice
but it's a mess that Sayid died _________________ I don't discuss to find the truth I discuss to have a voice
.:: Original SPAMMING 5 MEMBER ::.
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